Difference between revisions 1527958 and 1528703 on enwikinews

==Reporter's Notes:==
Announcement made by Australian Paralympic Committee and Cycling Australia in Adelaide.<br />
News item not yet picked up in mainstream media.<br />
Launch attended by Wikimedia Photographer: Bilby 
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Photos taken at the announcement:
* http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:South_Australian_Paralympic_Cyclists_2012.jpg
* http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Jayme_Paris_2012.jpg
* http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Scott_McPhee_and_Kieran_Modra_riding_02.jpg
* http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Scott_McPhee_and_Kieran_Modra_riding_01.jpg
* http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Scott_McPhee_01.jpg
* http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Scott_McPhee_02.jpg
* http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Stephanie_Morton_and_Felicity_Johnson_riding.jpg
[[User:Melissa Carlton|Melissa Carlton]] ([[User talk:Melissa Carlton|talk]]) 11:58, 12 June 2012 (UTC)

:I just wanted to confirm that I attended the event at the invitation of the Australian Paralympic Committee as an Australian Wikimedia representative to take the photographs listed above. The details covered at the event match the press release, and I had a chance to speak to the attending competitors (and their parents, in some cases) and can confirm the details through them. I have the APC press pack from the event, which also covers much the same material as the press release with the addition of bios of the athletes, and passed on a copy to Melissa. - [[User:Bilby|Bilby]] ([[User talk:Bilby|talk]]) 05:25, 13 June 2012 (UTC)⏎
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== Review of revision 1528672 [Not ready] ==

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* The term ''verifiability'' isn't perfectly descriptive of what I have in mind, but of the five criteria listed on the review template, it's the heading this best fits under.  I'll also mention things that would fall under ''copyright'' and ''NPOV'', though I didn't check those on the review form.
* The headline presents this as an article about the announcement of the team.  However, the [[WN:lede|lede]] mentions that only as an incidental; its apparent main focus is on Modra.  The headline, lede, and body of the article should all agree on what the focus is.
* Re "copyright", I noticed three points.  Most trivially, there was the use of "fifteen-strong"; really, that's a peculiar word choice that there's no need to imitate; as I said, trivial.  Then there's "number seven for Modra", which is both a distinctive turn of phrase that there's no need to imitate, and violates the low-level rule-of-thumb to avoid copying verbatim more than three consecutive words from a source.  But the biggest problem, in scale, is with the now-fourth paragraph, where there are two long runs verbatim and the first is a claim that should be attributed (which is an NPOV concern): "one of the most anticipated sports at London 2012" is verbatim from source, as is "one of Australia's most successful".  The claim about anticipation needs to be attributed, identifying who claimed it.  Note one oughtn't be looking to merely make minimal changes to these sorts of passages to avoid the four-consecutive-word thing, either; avoid imitating phrase, sentence, and of course overall structure as well.
* This article has effectively only one source, the APC press release.  The article is, in effect, a shortened version of that press release.  Accuracy, which is just one of the reasons for requiring two independent sources, ''might'' be satisfied by OR, but, granting a wm photographer was there, there aren't really any OR notes beyond proof of attendance, and there's nothing in the article that isn't in the press release (except the bit about vertebrae).|time=20:51, 13 June 2012 (UTC)}}